Example:
MMO (First novel):"The scribe looked extremely relieved. He let out a long breath and gave her a small smile. Then he sat back down at the head of the table and pointed meaningfully at the computer."
MMI (Third Novel): "Nicolas peered out the window at the drab landscape of factories and billboards. It was his first trip to America, and so far, he was not impressed. The training facility he was being taken to was in Gary, Indiana. He understood that it was in an industrial center, so the factories were expected, but it was the cloying, banal ads on the billboards that made Nicolas grind his teeth."
How exactly does one look "extremely relieved?" Also, why don't table and computer get adjectives when everything else does? Yikes!
But I do particularly like "that made Nicolas grind his teeth." So much better than saying something like "really annoyed Nicolas." Showing his annoyance rather than telling the reader about it.
As opposed to in MMO when I literally tell the reader that "The scribe looked extremely relieved." A much better sentence would have been something like, "The scribe whistled out a long low breath as if deflating and his shoulders sagged with relief."
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