The bold sentence above is one of my favorite sentences that I've written. I love the idea of time marching by, leaving the characters behind. I also love the turn of phrase "irrevocable past," because it is so true. We cannot change the past (unless we're playing with spells and/or time travel).
This sentence didn't start out so awesome though. There was talk of whether time should be marching into the future or the past ("time keeps on slipping, slipping, slipping into the future" - thank you Steve Miller Band). There was talk of whether the past was irretrievable or irrevocable. Also, I'm not sure whether the silence was always yawning or if it stretched in the beginning.
Just wanted to share.
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